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13．隨著網(wǎng)絡(luò)的發(fā)展，人們消費觀念的轉(zhuǎn)變，購物方式也在悄然地發(fā)生變化．"網(wǎng)購"成為一種時尚，越來越多的學生也正加入到網(wǎng)購群體當中．請你根據(jù)以下表格的提示，寫一篇網(wǎng)上購物的文章．

Advantages	Disadvantages
buy what you are interested in easily	The goods are different from the pictures you see on the Internet
avoid getting too tired； save time	Buy something you are not really needed
choose different goods； The price is lower

注意：①所表述的內(nèi)容必須包含表格中的所有方面；
②文中不能出現(xiàn)自己的姓名和所在學校的名稱及其它相關(guān)信息，否則不予評分；
③詞數(shù)：80 詞左右，文章開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)．
提示詞匯：網(wǎng)購shopping on line； 避免做某事avoid doing sth；商品goods； 導致cause 
With the development of the Internet，many people are used to shopping on line．It has become a fashion in our daily life．Some of us students also join the group．
Shopping on line has many advantages．Just by a click of the mouse，you can buy what you're interested in without going outdoors．You can avoid getting tired and being trapped in the crowded people and cars and save time．When shopping on line，you can choose from more varieties of goods，whose prices are generally lower．
Every coin has two sides．Its disadvantages are obvious，too．On one hand，it's very easy for you to buy goods different from the pictures you see on the Internet．On the other hand，shopping on line may cause people to buy goods that are not badly needed．That's a waste of money．
All in all，I love shopping on line．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內(nèi)容是說說網(wǎng)購的利弊．時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時．人稱主要為第二、三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
一．優(yōu)點：1．很容易買到自己感興趣的
          2．節(jié)約時間，不會擁擠勞累
          3．選擇不同的物品，價格通常比較便宜

二．缺點：1．實物和圖片不符
         2．容易購買大量不需要的東西，造成浪費
常用到的重點短語：
be used to doing sth 習慣于做某事
be interested in 對…感興趣
avoid doing sth 避免做某事
on one hand…，on the other hand…一方面…另一方面…
a waste of 浪費
【高分句型】
1．Just by a click of the mouse，you can buy ①what you're interested in②without going outdoors．
①what引導的賓語從句，作為buy的賓語．
②without介詞，沒有…，后加名詞代詞或動名詞．
2．①When shopping on line，you can choose from more varieties of goods，②whose prices are generally lower．
①When shopping on line是when you shop on line的縮寫．
②whose作為關(guān)系詞的非限制性定語從句
3．On the other hand，①shopping on line may cause people to buy goods ②that are not badly needed．
①動名詞短語做主語．
②that作為關(guān)系詞的定語從句，that作為從句的主語，修飾先行詞goods．

解答 With the development of the Internet，many people are used to shopping on line．It has become a fashion in our daily life．Some of us students also join the group．
Shopping on line has many advantages．Just by a click of the mouse，you can buy what you're interested in without going outdoors．【高分句型】You can avoid getting tired and being trapped in the crowded people and cars and save time．When shopping on line，you can choose from more varieties of goods，whose prices are generally lower．【高分句型】（優(yōu)點）
Every coin has two sides．Its disadvantages are obvious，too．On one hand，it's very easy for you to buy goods different from the pictures you see on the Internet．On the other hand，shopping on line may cause people to buy goods that are not badly needed．【高分句型】That's a waste of money．（缺點）
All in all，I love shopping on line．

點評 這是一篇提綱作文．本文要求按照所給的題目結(jié)合提示內(nèi)容完成這篇關(guān)于網(wǎng)上購物的文章．寫作中要包含網(wǎng)購的優(yōu)缺點、方面進行陳述，表達出人們的觀點等．根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要是一般現(xiàn)在時態(tài)，人稱主要是第三人稱，注意并列連詞的使用及主謂一致問題．寫作中注意上下文的過度，符合邏輯關(guān)系．
這篇短文詳細、全面地闡明了自己對網(wǎng)絡(luò)購物的看法，并包含了文中所要求的全部信息．其中使用了一些固定句式和短語、狀語從句中的省略，包含賓語從句和定語從句的準確使用為文章增色不少．如become a fashion in our daily life，On one hand，On the other hand，When shopping on line，buy what you're interested in，whose prices are generally lower．第三段中諺語的恰當使用也是可圈可點的，如Every coin has two sides．學習中再注意總結(jié)，牢記一些固定句式及短語，寫作時就可以適當引用，使文章的表達更有邏輯性，更富有條理．