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19．假如你是Li Ming，本周末班里舉行英語(yǔ)角活動(dòng)，用英語(yǔ)討論游泳安全問(wèn)題．請(qǐng)你用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇簡(jiǎn)單發(fā)言稿．要點(diǎn)如下：
1游泳有益健康；但有些地方不太安全；
2不要獨(dú)自到江河游泳；應(yīng)有家人或朋友陪伴；
3游泳前做好準(zhǔn)備工作，不要倉(cāng)促下水；
4游泳時(shí)相互關(guān)照；時(shí)間不要太長(zhǎng)．
5寫(xiě)1-2點(diǎn)個(gè)人建議．
要求：1詞數(shù)60-80，發(fā)言稿的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
2參考詞匯：keep fit 有益健康    look after關(guān)照   in a hurry倉(cāng)促
Fellow students，
As we know，swimming is a nice sport and a good way to keep us fit．But remember some placesare not so safe for us to swim in．Don't go to rivers or lakes alone．It's better to go with our parentsor friends．Before swimming，get ready for it and don't get into the water in a hurry．While swimming，try to look after each other．We'd better not stay in water too long．And don't swim too far．Enjoy it
when you go for a swim．
Thanks．
Thank s．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是寫(xiě)一篇有關(guān)游泳安全問(wèn)題的發(fā)言稿，時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．由于大量使用了祈使句人稱主要默認(rèn)為第二人稱．
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1游泳有益健康；但有些地方不太安全；
2不要獨(dú)自到江河游泳；應(yīng)有家人或朋友陪伴；
3游泳前做好準(zhǔn)備工作，不要倉(cāng)促下水；
4游泳時(shí)相互關(guān)照；時(shí)間不要太長(zhǎng)．
5個(gè)人建議
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
keep fit保持健康
get ready for為…作準(zhǔn)備
in a harry  急急忙忙
look after 照顧
had better do sth 最好做某事
【高分句型】
1．①As we know，②swimming is a nice sport and a good way③to keep us fit．
①as sb know據(jù)某人所知
②動(dòng)名詞做主語(yǔ)，謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞用單數(shù)is．
③動(dòng)詞不定式做后置定語(yǔ)，修飾way．
2．①Before swimming，②get ready for it and don't get into the water ③in a hurry．
①一個(gè)省略句，完整表達(dá)是before you swim，主語(yǔ)和主句一致故省略．
②get ready for為…作準(zhǔn)備
③in a harry  急急忙忙

解答 Fellow students，
     As we know，swimming is a nice sport and a good way to keep us fit．【高分句型】But remember some places are not so safe for us to swim in．（游泳有益健康；但有些地方不太安全）Don't go to rivers or lakes alone．It's better to go with our parents or friends．（不要獨(dú)自到江河游泳；應(yīng)有家人或朋友陪伴）Before swimming，get ready for it and don't get into the water in a hurry【高分句型】（游泳前做好準(zhǔn)備工作，不要倉(cāng)促下水）．While swimming，try to look after each other．We'd better not stay in water too long．（游泳時(shí)相互關(guān)照；時(shí)間不要太長(zhǎng)）And don't swim too far．Enjoy it when you go for a swim．（我的建議不要游泳太遠(yuǎn)）
Thanks．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 這是一篇提綱作文．考生在把握了文章的中心后，應(yīng)在內(nèi)心構(gòu)思一個(gè)基本的框架，并考慮使用恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~語(yǔ)、短語(yǔ)和句型，以充分地表達(dá)文章的內(nèi)容．盡可能地充分利用所學(xué)的短語(yǔ)或句型來(lái)表述具體的內(nèi)容，避免使用無(wú)把握或偏、難句型．注意所寫(xiě)句子要符合英語(yǔ)的表達(dá)習(xí)慣