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11．你班以"告別陋習(xí)，走向文明"為主題進(jìn)行了一次綜合實(shí)踐活動(dòng)．同學(xué)們收獲很大，尤其是鄭爽同學(xué)．請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下表內(nèi)容寫(xiě)一篇英語(yǔ)短文敘述鄭爽在活動(dòng)前后的表現(xiàn)．請(qǐng)你對(duì)今后的班級(jí)活動(dòng)提出一些建議．詞數(shù)在100詞左右．文章開(kāi)頭已給出，不記總詞數(shù)．

in the past	at the moment
come to school late	come to school early
quarrel with others	be friendly to others
make noise	listen to the teacher carefully
throw rubbish about	collect the rubbish

I am glad that Zheng Shuang has made great progress．In the past，he often came to school late．He often quarrelled with his classmates．He made much noise in class and he also threw rubbish everywhere．Sometimes he played computer games too much and his parents and teachers all worried about him．They often talked with him patiently．
But he has changed a lot recently．At the moment，he comes to school on time．He is friendly with his classmates and gets on well with them．He listens to the teachers carefully in class．He often helps collect rubbish with other students．He can finish his homework carefully on time．All the teachers and his classmates think highly of him．
I hope our class will organize more activities．Our classmates will take an active part in them．We will certainly be more helpful，more friendly，more skillful and have many other good qualities．．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇圖表作文．內(nèi)容是敘述鄭爽在"告別陋習(xí)，走向文明"活動(dòng)前后的表現(xiàn)．請(qǐng)你對(duì)今后的班級(jí)活動(dòng)提出一些建議．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般過(guò)去時(shí)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第一、三人稱．
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1．過(guò)去；上學(xué)遲到，和別人吵架，制造噪音，亂扔垃圾
2．現(xiàn)在；早點(diǎn)上學(xué)，對(duì)他人友好，仔細(xì)聽(tīng)課，收集垃圾
3．我的建議
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
make progress 取得進(jìn)步
quarrel with sb 與某人吵架
make noise 制造噪音
get on with sb 與某人相處
take part in 參加

【高分句型】
1．I am glad that Zheng Shuang has made great progress．
I am glad 我很開(kāi)心，that賓語(yǔ)從句正好對(duì)此作出陳述或說(shuō)明．
2．Sometimes he played computer games too much①and his parents and teachers②all worried about him．
①and連接的兩個(gè)并列句．
②worry about  擔(dān)心
3．I hope our class will organize more activities．
hope后省略了引導(dǎo)詞that的賓語(yǔ)從句．

解答 I am glad that Zheng Shuang has made great progress【高分句型】In the past，he often came to school late．He often quarrelled with his classmates．He made much noise in class and he also threw rubbish everywhere．Sometimes he played computer games too much and his parents and teachers all worried about him．【高分句型】They often talked with him patiently．（鄭爽的過(guò)去）
   But he has changed a lot recently．At the moment，he comes to school on time．He is friendly with his classmates and gets on well with them．He listens to the teachers carefully in class．He often helps collect rubbish with other students．He can finish his homework carefully on time．All the teachers and his classmates think highly of him．（鄭爽的現(xiàn)在）
   I hope our class will organize more activities．【高分句型】Our classmates will take an active part in them．We will certainly be more helpful，more friendly，more skillful and have many other good qualities．（我的建議）

點(diǎn)評(píng) 這是一篇給材料作文．以表格的形式給出了作文的主要內(nèi)容，我們要做的就是用正確的英語(yǔ)把這些內(nèi)容表達(dá)出來(lái)．動(dòng)筆前要認(rèn)真閱讀材料，不可遺漏要點(diǎn)．根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容確定主要句子的時(shí)態(tài)，及句式等重要內(nèi)容．由于材料涉及過(guò)去和現(xiàn)在的內(nèi)容，故注意過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài)和一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)的應(yīng)用．
該題型主要考查學(xué)生的語(yǔ)言表達(dá)能力，在寫(xiě)作中根據(jù)所給提示和語(yǔ)言信息，不遺漏要點(diǎn)，可以適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．做到表達(dá)清楚，語(yǔ)法正確，上下文連貫