Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)(滿分15分)

每個(gè)人都有自己的夢(mèng)想，努力堅(jiān)持終能實(shí)現(xiàn)。請(qǐng)根據(jù)下面表格中所提供的信息用英文寫一篇短文。

要求：所寫內(nèi)容必須包括表格中的所有信息，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮；

詞數(shù)：80左右(開頭與結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)).

Tom	1．出身貧寒，付不起學(xué)費(fèi)，但一直自學(xué)，考取了大學(xué)； 2．上大學(xué)時(shí)堅(jiān)持打零工(part-time job) 自食其力。 3．堅(jiān)持夢(mèng)想 (follow one’s dream)，擁有了自己的公司。
You	你的夢(mèng)想	……（內(nèi)容自擬）
	如何實(shí)現(xiàn)你的夢(mèng)想	1．勤奮學(xué)習(xí)； 2．……（內(nèi)容自擬）

Everyone has his dream. The one who never gives up can achieve his goal. Tom is a good example. _______________________________________________________________________________

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I will never give up my dream whenever facing difficulties. I’m sure my dream will come true.

Answer 1

【答案】

Everyone has his dream. The one who never gives up can achieve his/her goal. Tom is a very good example. He was born in a poor family. His parents didn't have enough money to pay for his study so that he couldn't go to school. He was very sad, but nothing could stop him from studying. He kept on learning by himself at home. At last, he got high grades and entered his ideal college. In the college, he did part-time jobs for a living and worked hard at his study. Because he followed his dream all the time, he became the owner of a large farm successfully.

I have my own dream, too. I want to be a teacher to help the children in poor areas. From now on, I must work hard, correct my own shortcomings and improve myself.

I will never give up my dream whenever facing difficulties. I'm sure my dream will come true.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們來(lái)講述一下如何實(shí)現(xiàn)自己的夢(mèng)想，題目中給出了我們具體的寫作內(nèi)容，我們先要介紹一下Tom是怎么實(shí)現(xiàn)自己的夢(mèng)想的，然后再談一談自己的夢(mèng)想是什么，如何來(lái)實(shí)現(xiàn)自己的夢(mèng)想。通過分析可知，這篇短文中第一部分，在介紹Tom這個(gè)具體事例的時(shí)候，我們應(yīng)該用一般過去時(shí)態(tài)；敘述自己的夢(mèng)想時(shí)，用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)。我們要注意動(dòng)詞的正確形式，尤其是動(dòng)詞過去式的不規(guī)則變化。另外，寫作時(shí)，我們也應(yīng)使用一些平時(shí)積累的較好的短語(yǔ)和句型，來(lái)使整篇短文的表達(dá)更加流暢。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這是一篇優(yōu)秀的范文，短文中作者按照題目的要求，先介紹了Tom是如何實(shí)現(xiàn)自己的夢(mèng)想的，然后又聯(lián)系到自己，敘述了自己的夢(mèng)想，以及實(shí)現(xiàn)夢(mèng)想的決心。短文中作者使用豐富的句型和短語(yǔ)，如The one who never gives up can achieve his/her goal，這句話中作者使用了一個(gè)定語(yǔ)從句；His parents didn't have enough money to pay for his study so that he couldn't go to school這句話中使用了so that 引導(dǎo)的結(jié)果狀語(yǔ)從句；He was very sad, but nothing could stop him from studying這句中使用了stop sb. from doing sth.這一句型，表示阻止某人做某事；Because he followed his dream all the time, he became the owner of a large farm successfully這句中使用了because引導(dǎo)的原因狀語(yǔ)從句；I will never give up my dream whenever facing difficulties.這句中使用了whenever后跟現(xiàn)在分詞形式。這些句型的使用提升了作文的檔次。