Question

【題目】在每個人的成長過程中，都或多或少有一些變化，請以How I’ve Changed! 為題寫一段話，介紹一下你的過去與現在的不同。（80~100詞）

How I’ve changed!

Answer 1

【答案】

How I've changed!

My life changed a lot in the last few years，I used to be short and have long hair ,but now I am tall and have short hair ,I used to be quiet and shy ,now I am very outgoing .I used to be afraid of dark ,now I am not .I used to be heavy ,now I am thin and healthy .

My daily life is different and I used to like different thing when I was a child.For example,I didn't use to like tests.Now,I don't mind them.I used to hate gym class.Now it's my favorite class. I used to walk to school. Now, I take the bus .when I was young, I used to have so much time to play with my friends ,but now I am really too busy ,I have to get up early and stay in school all day ,then I go right home and eat dinner.at night, I used to watch TV with my parent or chat with my grandmother , but now I can't . I love sports ,but now, I hardly ever have time to play sport. I have to do lots of homework . I really miss the old days！

【解析】

試題分析：根據所給材料可知這是一篇命題作文，介紹自己的變化。動筆前首先根據主題組織材料，確定寫作內容。寫作中，應注意描述的全面性，盡量將提示的內容利用上；結合材料內容，可知本文主要是第一人稱，一般現在時態(tài)進行敘述。語言的表述應該符合語法的結構，造句應該符合英語的表達習慣。適當使用連詞，做到上下文聯系緊密，符合邏輯關系。

【亮點說明】這篇短文包含了所有要點，能圍繞內容要點適當發(fā)揮，內容具體、豐富。應用了較豐富的語言結構和詞匯，用詞準確、句子通順、行文連貫、表達清楚，具有較強的語言運用能力。層次清晰，語言地道，主題鮮明，內容翔實，格式正確，結構緊湊。使用了一些比較好的字句。比如：used to，過去常常做某事；be afraid of，害怕；get up等。學習中注意總結,牢記一些固定句式及短語,寫作時就可以適當引用, 讓文章更出彩。