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5．假設(shè)你是Emma，你的筆友Josh給你寫了一封電子郵件，向你傾訴他在家里的一些煩惱．請(qǐng)根據(jù)來信和提示，給Josh回一封電子郵件．先說說你的看法，再給出建議，并適當(dāng)發(fā)揮．
提示：1．內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)：（1）看法：在父母看來，我們?nèi)允呛⒆�；父母這樣做是為了保護(hù)我們．
（2）建議：給父母寫信談?wù)勀愕南敕�；主�?dòng)幫你父母做些力所能及的事情．
2．回信應(yīng)包括以上所有提示的信息，做到行文連貫，不要逐字翻譯．
3．詞數(shù)：不少于80．開頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．

Dear Josh，
Thanks for your e-mail．I have ever had the same experience．I even had a fight with my parents．But now，I understand them．We are growing up，but often，it's hard for our parents to see this．To them，weare still children and they want to protect us．
Sometimes，it's hard for you to talk to your parents．Here's an idea：Write your mother and father a letter．In the letter，tell your parents what you are thinking about．Then maybe they will understand you better．After your parents read the letter，try to talk to them．In your free time，you'd better do something you can to help your parents．For example，you can help your parents with some housework．
What's more，you can describe your friends to your parents and tell them more about you and your life．

I hope this helps!
Emma．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是針對(duì)Josh的來信中說到的家里的一些煩惱談?wù)効捶ㄒ约敖o出建議．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱主要為第二人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點(diǎn)：
（1）看法：在父母看來，我們?nèi)允呛⒆�；父母這樣做是為了保護(hù)我們．
（2）建議：給父母寫信談?wù)勀愕南敕�；主�?dòng)幫你父母做些力所能及的事情．

常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
It's+adj+for sb．to do sth．對(duì)某人來說做某事是怎么樣的
try to do sth 盡力做某事
grow up 長(zhǎng)大
talk to sb 與某人交談
in one's free time 在某人空閑時(shí)
help sb with sth 幫助某人做某事
What's more 另外 而且

高分句型：
1．We are growing up，①but often，②it's hard for our parents to see this．
①but 但是，是連詞，表示轉(zhuǎn)折，不能與although雖然連用．
②It's+adj+for sb．to do sth．對(duì)某人來說做某事是怎么樣的．這里的形容詞是對(duì)動(dòng)作的一般性描述．
2．①In your free time，②you'd better do something ③you can ④to help your parents．
①in one's free time在某人空閑時(shí)．
②had better do sth 最好做某事，常用來表示提出建議．
③you can是定語(yǔ)從句，修飾先行詞something不定代詞，省略了關(guān)系詞that做為定語(yǔ)從句的賓語(yǔ)．
④to help your parents 動(dòng)詞不定式做目的狀語(yǔ)．

解答 Dear Josh，
    Thanks for your e-mail．I have ever had the same experience．I even had a fight with my parents．But  now，I understand them．We are growing up，but often，it's hard for our parents to see this．（高分句型）To them，we are still children and they want to protect us．（我的看法）
     Sometimes，it's hard for you to talk to your parents．Here's an idea：Write your mother and father a letter．In the letter，tell your parents what you are thinking about．Then maybe they will understand you better．After your parents read the letter，try to talk to them．（寫信談?wù)勀愕南敕ǎ?In your free time，you'd better do something you can to help your parents．（高分句型）For example，you can help your parents with some housework．（主動(dòng)幫你父母）
     What's more，you can describe your friends to your parents and tell them more about you and your life．
     I hope this helps!
     Emma

點(diǎn)評(píng) 此為材料作文，要仔細(xì)審題，抓住重點(diǎn)，將所給信息條理清楚的表達(dá)出來，可使用一些表示順序的詞，使論述更明確，更有層次感．還要注意多使用一些委婉的提建議的句型，盡量使用不同的句型以避免文章枯燥單調(diào)．要求語(yǔ)句通順，語(yǔ)法，詞匯，時(shí)態(tài)正確，書寫規(guī)范．