Question

【題目】書面表達(dá)

在八年級(jí)即將結(jié)束之際，八(1)班 將舉行一次主題班會(huì)，要求同學(xué)們談?wù)勔荒陙碜约旱氖斋@與變化。請為David準(zhǔn)備一份100字左右的演講稿，具體內(nèi)容如下：

	過去	現(xiàn)在
學(xué)習(xí)	很少閱讀，花時(shí)間在……	讀書使我放松……
環(huán)保	浪費(fèi)水電，隨處亂拋垃圾	意識(shí)到環(huán)保的重要性，垃圾入桶
禮儀	大聲喧嘩，插隊(duì)推擠	舉止禮貌，主動(dòng)讓座
愛心	不知道如何關(guān)心他人	……
展望未來	相信自己在將來會(huì)越來越棒。

Hello, everyone. I’m David from Class 1, Grade 8. Back to the life in the last year, I think I have changed a lot and made great progress in many ways.

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Thanks for listening!

Answer 1

【答案】

Hello, everyone. I’m David from Class 1, Grade 8. Back to the life in the last year, I think I have changed a lot and made great progress in many ways.

First, In the past I seldom read books. I used to spend most of my time playing computers games. Now I find it interesting to do some reading because good books help me relax after a busy day. They also open up a whole new world to me.

Second, I always forgot to turn off the tap and the power when they were not in use. Sometimes I left the tap running after I washed my hands. I always dropped litter carelessly in the park. But now I have realized the importance of protecting the environment. I always throw the litter into the rubbish bins.

Third, I was impolite before. I sometimes shouted loudly or pushed in before others in public places. Now, I can behave politely in public and I often give my seat to someone in need on the bus.

Fourth, I cared little about others. But now I offer to help my blind neighbors and donate all my pocket money to Project Hope.

I’m sure I will do better and better in Grade 9.

Thanks for listening!

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇表格作文。我們要用恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z言把所列舉的內(nèi)容準(zhǔn)確地表達(dá)出來，但不能逐句翻譯。寫作中一年來自己的收獲與變化要包含學(xué)習(xí)，環(huán)保，禮儀，愛心等幾個(gè)方面。最后展望自己的未來。根據(jù)材料內(nèi)容可知本文主要用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)與一般過去時(shí)態(tài)進(jìn)行比較，展望自己的未來采用一般將來時(shí)態(tài)。注意并列連詞的使用及主謂一致問題。寫作中注意上下文的過度，符合邏輯關(guān)系。

寫作亮點(diǎn)：這篇短文簡明、扼要地闡明了表格中的基本信息，并包含了文中所要求的全部信息。文章語言規(guī)范，詞匯及時(shí)態(tài)運(yùn)用正確，能夠把提示的內(nèi)容敘述清楚，，First, Second, Third, Fourth, 的使用，使語句通順，意思更連貫，Now I find it interesting to do some reading because good books help me relax after a busy day. They also open up a whole new world to me.語言很經(jīng)典，是一篇不錯(cuò)的文章。