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BBC World Have Your Say："Life in China" Every day，BBC News on TV，radio and online brings you stories from across the world．But what we want to hear are the stories that matter to you． Have got a story about life in China today？If you do，please put your stories here．

I like travaling and I have traveled a lot around China．During the trip，I often find that a number of Chinese don't have good pulic manners（舉止）．They always loudly on the phone and smoke everywhere．The worst is that they often break the rules in public．For example，when I travled in HongKong in January this year，I saw a kid eating noodles on the underground，which is against the rules．However，the kid's mother didn't think he did wrong．Can you believe it？Let's improve our public manners．（Mike，Shenzhen）

I am a 14-year-old boy from a poor village in Fuyang，Anhui Province．Like many other left-behind children（留守兒童 ）in China，l live with my grandparents now．my father went to work in Shanghai several years ago．Last year，my mother went there to care for him because his health is not as good as before．They tell me to listen to my grandparents and call me about twice a month to ask about my study．I really miss my parents ans I hope I can afford to go to school in Shanghai．I think every child needs parents'love and care．（Wu Peigen，Anhui Province）

假如你是一名叫李明（Li Ming）的中學生，看了上述故事后，你想表達自己的看法． 請你給欄目編輯寫一封電子郵件，內容包括：
1．你對其中的哪個故事感興趣？原因是什么？
2．你對這個故事所提及的現(xiàn)象的看法．
3．就該現(xiàn)象提出至少兩條解決問題的建議．
作文要求：
1．不能照抄原文；不得在作文中出現(xiàn)學校真實的名稱和學生的真實姓名．
2．語句連貫，詞數(shù)80個左右．作文開頭和結尾已經(jīng)給出，不計入總詞數(shù)，也不必抄寫在答題卡上．
Dear Editor，
I read the stories on BBC World Have Your Say today，
Iam interested in Mike's story，because I had the same experience when I traveled in Guangzhou．I can't stand bad
manners in public，either．In fact，I really get angry when people jump the queen
and smoke in non-smoking areas．I think it's wrong to break the rules in public．
In my opinion，we should know more about good manners．On the other hand，we had
better stop people around us from being rude．If we can't stop them，we can always
ask the police or someone like that for help．
Yours，
Li Ming
                                                                       Your，
                                                                       Li Ming．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內容是看了上述故事后，給欄目組寫封郵件表達一下自己的看法．注意郵件的格式，時態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時．人稱主要為第一人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1．你對其中的哪個故事感興趣？原因是什么？
2．你對這個故事所提及的現(xiàn)象的看法．
3．就該現(xiàn)象提出至少兩條解決問題的建議．
第一篇文章的大意是：英國的廣播公司每天都給你們帶來來自全世界的不同的故事，但是我們想聽到的是關于你的故事？你有在中國生活的故事嗎？如果有，請將故事寫在這．
第二篇文章的大意是：我喜歡旅游，旅行中我經(jīng)常發(fā)現(xiàn)許多中國人的行為舉止不夠好，他們經(jīng)常大聲講電話，四處抽煙，最遭的是他們不遵守規(guī)則，例如我在香港看見一個小男孩不遵守規(guī)則，但是他的媽媽認為是對的，讓我們改善我們的舉止吧！
第三篇文章的大意是：我是來自于安徽阜陽的一個窮山村的男孩，像其他的留守兒童一樣，我和我的爺爺奶奶一起住，爸爸在上海工作，去年我的媽媽也去上海照顧我的爸爸，他們讓我聽爺爺奶奶的話并且一個月打兩次電話詢問我的學習，我真的想我的爸爸媽媽，我希望我能去上海上學，我認為每個小孩都希望有父母的關愛．
常用到的重點短語：
be interested in 對…感興趣
can't stand 無法忍受
in fact事實上
on the other hand另一方面
had better do sth最好做某事
stop sb from doing sth阻止某人做某事
【高分句型】
1．I ①am interested in Mike's story，②because I had the same experience③when I traveled in Guangzhou．
①be interested in 對…感興趣．
②because引導的原因狀語從句．
③when引導的時間狀語從句．
2．①On the other hand，we②had better③stop people ④around us from being rude．
①on the other hand另一方面．
②had better do sth最好做某事．
③stop sb from doing sth阻止某人做某事
④around us介詞短語做后置定語，修飾people．

解答 Dear Editor，
I read the stories on BBC World Have Your Say today．I am interested in Mike's story，because I had the same experience when I traveled in Guangzhou．【高分句型】（你對其中的哪個故事感興趣？原因是什么）I can't stand bad manners in public，either．In fact，I really get angry when people jump the queen and smoke in non-smoking areas．I think it's wrong to break the rules in public．（你對這個故事所提及的現(xiàn)象的看法）In my opinion，we should know more about good manners．On the other hand，we had better stop people around us from being rude．【高分句型】If we can't stop them，we can always ask the police or someone like that for help．（解決問題的建議）
Yours，
Li Ming

點評 提綱作文是一項能夠充分考查學生語言綜合運用能力的題型．主要考查學生運用已學的語言基礎知識和已掌握的英語寫作技能準確表達客觀事實，闡述個人觀點，進行思想交流的書面表達能力．為了提高書面表達水平，平時應加強閱讀，應背誦一些句型、段落、甚至短文．只要讀得多，背得多，就能出口成章，下筆成文．此外，還要了解英文寫作方面的基礎知識，掌握常用文體的寫作方法．其實，用英文寫信，記日記等都是學生力所能及且行之有效的練習寫作的好方法．