Question

書面表達

假如你是《達州晚報》的小記者，星期六和同學去參加了“文明小市民”的活動。請根據(jù)下面提供的信息，把當天的活動寫成日記發(fā)表在晚報上，倡導(dǎo)更多的同學和市民來關(guān)心環(huán)境綜合治理。

要求：1．日記內(nèi)容應(yīng)包括以上提示的所有內(nèi)容，可適當發(fā)揮。

2．書寫工整，句式規(guī)范，條理清楚。

3．不得出現(xiàn)真實的姓名和地名。

4．日記的格式和開頭已給出(不計入總詞數(shù))。詞數(shù)：80詞左右。

提示詞語：at the school gate(在校門口)

Saturday，March 14th

I took part in the“Civilized Citizen”activity with my classmates today．

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Answer 1

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解析：

One possible version： 　　Saturday, March14th 　　I took part in the“Civilized Citizen”activity with my classmates today．We got together at the school gate at 8∶30a.m．a(chǎn)nd left for the People’s Park．On the way to the park, we found some people break the traffic rules．For example, two men went across the street when the traffic lights were red．In the park, people were having fun．But a few children were climbing the trees or drawing pictures on the walls．Many people were talking loudly in public．And on the ground, too much litter had been thrown here and there． 　　To change this situation, we began to pick up the litter and throw it into the dustbin, clean the walls, and plant trees．And then we told the children that climbing trees is dangerous and bad for the trees．Also, we said politely to some people,“Would you mind keeping your voice down and enjoy the quiet of the park?”After hearing our words, those people all realized their mistakes and corrected them immediately．At that moment, we felt excited and proud． 　　Environment is rather important to all of us．Though our today’s activity can’t totally solve the problem of the environment, I believe we can make people understand that even the simplest everyday activities can make a real difference to the environment．Let’s work together to make the world a better place to live in! 　　一、評分原則 　　1．本題總分為10分，按四個檔次給分，至少包含以下要點：集合的時間和地點、活動地點、發(fā)現(xiàn)的不良現(xiàn)象、采取的措施、活動的意義和感受。評分時，先根據(jù)短文的內(nèi)容和語言初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量，確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分。 　　2．文中若出現(xiàn)真實的人名、地名，酌情扣分。 　　二、評分標準 　　三、說明 　　對緊扣主題的適當發(fā)揮不予扣分。相同的錯誤不重復(fù)計算。