Question

根據(jù)下表所列內(nèi)容，寫一篇文章介紹你的筆友張平，并根據(jù)他的困惑給他提一些建議。要點(diǎn)表達(dá)要全，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮。字?jǐn)?shù)100字左右。

	出生日期	1997年8月23日
基本	星座	Virgo
情況	個(gè)性	謙虛，實(shí)事求是，注重細(xì)節(jié)。
愛(ài)好	酷愛(ài)足球，熱愛(ài)大自然，加入Birdwatching Club兩年了
	學(xué)習(xí)	作業(yè)多，想考高分，壓力大。
問(wèn)題	情感	父母整天忙于工作，不時(shí)感到孤獨(dú)。
	穿白色衣服，因?yàn)椤��?/p>
建議	使用黃色文具復(fù)習(xí)迎考，因?yàn)椤��?/p>
多與家人朋友……

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

I have a pen friend, Zhang Ping. He was born on August 23,1997.He was Virgo.His personality

is modest ,realistic and deatailed. He is fond of playing football and nature.He has been in Birddwatching Club for two years. He has lots of homework to do .Because he wants to get high scores in College Entrance Examination,he feels stressed very much.He also feels lonely ,just because his parents are busy .

I think he should wear white clothes because white can makes him feel calm .He should choose yellow stationary to prepare for the exam because yellow can make him feel happy. And he should spend more time staying with his families and friends ,then he can feel happier.

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。本文作者分兩部分寫作，第一部分介紹筆友張平的基本情況和問(wèn)題，第二分針對(duì)其問(wèn)題提出建議。 本文主要以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主，但也有一般過(guò)去時(shí)和過(guò)去完成時(shí)。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文中使用了非常好的短語(yǔ)和句子為文章增色不少，例如 was born on， is fond of， lots of，prepare for，狀語(yǔ)從句just because his parents are busy，because yellow can make him feel happy，because white can makes him feel calm ，賓語(yǔ)從句I think he should wear white clothes because white can makes him feel calm 。文章層次清晰，內(nèi)容飽滿，表達(dá)流暢。

考點(diǎn)：提綱作文。