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17．假如你是即將畢業(yè)的高三學(xué)生李華．來(lái)你校進(jìn)行交流學(xué)習(xí)的澳大利亞學(xué)生Sam也將結(jié)束在中國(guó)的學(xué)習(xí)回國(guó)．分手之際，全班同學(xué)都在互致畢業(yè)留言．作為他的好朋友，請(qǐng)你根據(jù)下列提示用英語(yǔ)給他寫(xiě)一份留言．
    1．感謝他在英語(yǔ)學(xué)習(xí)方面給你的幫助：
    2．回憶你們一起經(jīng)歷的一件事：
    3．表達(dá)良好祝愿．   
注意：1．詞數(shù)：120-150；開(kāi)頭與結(jié)尾已經(jīng)給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
      2．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear Sam．
How time flies、I  Two years has passed before l realize it．________________________
Best wishes!
    Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文為提綱類(lèi)的書(shū)信作文，要求就畢業(yè)之際對(duì)在中國(guó)留學(xué)兩年的Sam寫(xiě)一封畢業(yè)留言信．要點(diǎn)已經(jīng)給出：感謝幫助、回憶往事以及表達(dá)祝愿，但具體的內(nèi)容要靠自己發(fā)揮，描述要盡量選擇簡(jiǎn)潔的語(yǔ)言，運(yùn)用合適的語(yǔ)法規(guī)則和詞匯把各要點(diǎn)都準(zhǔn)確表述出．難點(diǎn)在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運(yùn)用高級(jí)詞匯和固定短語(yǔ)準(zhǔn)確表述．審題時(shí)注意本文主要使用一般過(guò)去時(shí)，人稱(chēng)以第一人稱(chēng)為主．
重要短語(yǔ)：
shared sth together共享某事，assist sb with sth幫助某人某事，be filled with充滿(mǎn)，ride by汽車(chē)經(jīng)過(guò)，send sb/sth to sp將某人（某物）送到某地，in good condition狀況良好．
高分句型：
1．Well，I guess you remember the dog named Candy which we saved on the windy Sunday when we rode by an abandoned factory．本句中包含一個(gè)過(guò)去分詞短語(yǔ)named Candy作后置定語(yǔ)，修飾the dog，which引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句，后面還有一個(gè)when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句．
2．Discovering that she was badly injured，we sent her to the pet hospital immediately．這句為現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)作時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)，相當(dāng)于一個(gè)when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句when we discovered that she was badly injured．

解答 Dear Sam，
How time flies!Two years have passed before I realize it．Now，it's time to say goodbye．But happily still，we shared so many precious memories together．（寫(xiě)信目的）
I was in a difficult situation learning English when you first arrived at our school．After knowing each other，you generously assisted me with my study in English，which improved my level greatly．My heart is still filled with appreciation．（表達(dá)感謝）
Well，I guess you remember the dog named Candy which we saved on the windy Sunday when we rode by an abandoned factory．（高分句型）Discovering that she was badly injured，we sent her to the pet hospital immediately．（高分句型）Thanks God．Candy is in good condition now，living in Ms Tian's home．（回憶往事）
Sam，whenever you come back，we all welcome．May you have a bright future．And best wishes．（表達(dá)愿望）
Yours sincerely，
 Li hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 本文屬于書(shū)信類(lèi)應(yīng)用文．本文在結(jié)構(gòu)上采用了經(jīng)典的四段式，符合電子郵件的寫(xiě)作模式．書(shū)信的格式正確，文句通順，表達(dá)自然流暢，語(yǔ)言地道、規(guī)范．靈活的運(yùn)用了一些高級(jí)詞匯和固定短語(yǔ)準(zhǔn)確表述，其中包含了定語(yǔ)從句、狀語(yǔ)從句以及非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞的準(zhǔn)確適用都為本文增添了色彩，