Question

17．假設(shè)你是李華，一名高三學(xué)生，在網(wǎng)絡(luò)上看到一所國(guó)外大學(xué)的招生信息 （admission information），該大學(xué)對(duì)中國(guó)學(xué)生開(kāi)設(shè)30多個(gè)專(zhuān)業(yè)，你對(duì)此非常感興趣，打算用英語(yǔ)撰寫(xiě)一份個(gè)人申請(qǐng)，主要內(nèi)容包括：
1．想申請(qǐng)的專(zhuān)業(yè)；
2．個(gè)人優(yōu)勢(shì)；
3．進(jìn)入大學(xué)后的設(shè)想．
注意：1．詞數(shù)：100左右；
2．書(shū)信格式已給出；
3．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear Sir or Madam，
I have recently noticed the admission information of your university onthe Internet．I'm writing to apply for management among all the majors offered to usChinese students．
For one thing，I do well in English and it will be easy for me to complete the coursesin your university．For another，I have been the monitor during my school years，which has promoted myorganizing ability．Having organized a few school activities successfully，I'm determined to be amanager as my dream job．Therefore，my plan is to join the Students'Union and participate in somemeaningful social activities to learn some advanced management experience．
I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon．
Yours Sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，向?qū)χ袊?guó)學(xué)生開(kāi)設(shè)30多個(gè)專(zhuān)業(yè)的國(guó)外一所大學(xué)寫(xiě)一封申請(qǐng)書(shū)．寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)包括：1．想申請(qǐng)的專(zhuān)業(yè)； 2．個(gè)人優(yōu)勢(shì)； 3．進(jìn)入大學(xué)后的設(shè)想．時(shí)態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)為主．人稱(chēng)以第一人稱(chēng)和第三人稱(chēng)為主．重要短語(yǔ)：apply for…（申請(qǐng)…），offer sth to sb（給某人提供某物），do well in …（在…方面做得好），promote my organizingability （提升我的組織能力），be determined to do （下定決心做某事），participate in （參加），hear from sb（收到某人來(lái)信）．
【高分句型】
1．I have been the monitor during my school years，which has promoted my organizing ability．
這里是which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，which在從句中作主語(yǔ)，指代前面整個(gè)主句的內(nèi)容．
2．Having organized a few school activities successfully，I'm determined to be a manager as my dream job．
這里是現(xiàn)在分詞的完成式 Having organized 作原因狀語(yǔ)，主句的主語(yǔ)是I與動(dòng)詞organize構(gòu)成邏輯上的主動(dòng)關(guān)系．

解答 Dear Sir or Madam，
I have recently noticed the admission information of your university onthe Internet．I'm writing to apply for management among all the majors offered to usChinese students．（想申請(qǐng)的專(zhuān)業(yè)）
For one thing，I do well in English and it will be easy for me to complete the coursesin your university．For another，I have been the monitor during my school years，which has promoted myorganizing ability．【高分句型】（個(gè)人優(yōu)勢(shì)）
Having organized a few school activities successfully，I'm determined to be amanager as my dream job．【高分句型】Therefore，my plan is to join theStudents'Union and participate in some meaningful social activities to learnsome advanced management experience．（進(jìn)入大學(xué)后的設(shè)想）
I'm looking forward to hearing from you soon．
Yours Sincerely，
Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 提綱作文在寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點(diǎn)．寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時(shí)需注意積累短語(yǔ)和重要句型．