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【題目】假設(shè)你是高二學(xué)生李華，你所居住的城市正在爭(zhēng)創(chuàng)全國(guó)文明城市（National Civilized City），作為一個(gè)有責(zé)任心的市民，你注意到了兩個(gè)有待改進(jìn)的現(xiàn)象，即共享單車（shared bike）隨意擺放；行人車輛時(shí)有搶道。請(qǐng)你給市長(zhǎng)寫封信，建議關(guān)注這兩個(gè)問題并提出你的相應(yīng)整改措施。

注意：開頭結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Mayor,

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Yours Sincerely,

Li Hua

Answer 1

【答案】Dear Mayor,

I’m Li Hua, a student in Grade Two. Since our city is struggling for National Civilized City, as a responsible citizen, I think there is something to be improved.

As we can see, shared bikes, increasingly popular in our city, are often parked at random, which damages the image of our city. Besides, the traffic issue is still a hard nut to crack because some drivers and pedestrians usually ignore the traffic rules, thus causing many accidents.

My suggestions are as follows. Firstly, the government should produce stricter rules to regulate the management of bike-sharing system. Secondly, campaigns should be launched to remind the pubic to obey the public rules.

I would appreciate it if you could take my suggestions into serious account.

Yours Sincerely,

Li Hua

【解析】這篇文章是一封信，注意寫信的格式。任務(wù)中給出的提示信息包含兩個(gè)內(nèi)容1. 共享單車（shared bike）隨意擺放；2.行人車輛時(shí)有搶道。抓住了這亮點(diǎn)，我們就抓住了文章的核心內(nèi)容。并且一定要提出你的相應(yīng)整改措施�？紤]用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)，第一人稱來寫。具體來說，寫這篇文章時(shí)，要注意:1、提示中的內(nèi)容比較泛泛，需要適當(dāng)補(bǔ)充；2、為使文章層次清楚，可分三個(gè)自然段寫：第一自然段總的說明你所居住的城市正在爭(zhēng)創(chuàng)全國(guó)文明城市；第二自然指出自己發(fā)現(xiàn)的兩個(gè)現(xiàn)象；第三自然段提出自己的建議。這篇文章對(duì)于考生的綜合能力要求較高，要求考生有很強(qiáng)的謀篇布局的能力和組織要點(diǎn)的能力。需要注意緊扣文章主題，給出的要點(diǎn)都需要包括，缺一不可。寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系，一定要契合給出的開頭，不能出現(xiàn)文章脫節(jié)問題。盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時(shí)也要注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句型使文章顯得更有檔次。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】本篇書面表達(dá)要點(diǎn)全面，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，是一篇較好的范文。這篇短文使用了大量的短語，為文章增色不少，如: struggle for為……奮斗，at random胡亂。還使用了賓語從句I think there is something to be improved.和定語從句As we can see, shared bikes, increasingly popular in our city, are often parked at random, which damages the image of our city.等多種句式結(jié)構(gòu)，增加了文章的可讀性。