Question

7．你校的外教Thomas想了解剛剛結(jié)束的英語(yǔ)口語(yǔ)培訓(xùn)班效果，以便制定下一步的培訓(xùn)計(jì)劃．假如你是李明，是該培訓(xùn)班的學(xué)員，想再參加寫作培訓(xùn)，請(qǐng)按照所給提示用英語(yǔ)給Thomas 寫一封電子郵件．
1．說(shuō)明收獲2．表達(dá)謝意3．提出建議或要求
注意：1．詞數(shù)：100左右；2．可以適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
3．郵件的開(kāi)關(guān)和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一封書信，屬于應(yīng)用文格式．要求以李明的口吻給外教Thomas寫信，告知本次培訓(xùn)班的收獲，并提出建議和要求．所以要使用第一人稱，在描述過(guò)去這一次培訓(xùn)時(shí)，使用一般過(guò)去時(shí)．在提出建議或者要求時(shí)可以使用一般將來(lái)時(shí)．
要點(diǎn)：1．說(shuō)明收獲．口語(yǔ)得到提高，并交到新朋友；
2．表示感謝，希望對(duì)方能夠再次開(kāi)設(shè)這樣的培訓(xùn)班；
3．提出建議或者要求：建議對(duì)方增加寫作方面的培訓(xùn)．

重點(diǎn)詞匯與短語(yǔ)：
1．owing to 由于
2．smooth away 擺平
3．benefit from 受益于

高分句型
 1．My spoken English has greatly improved owing to the effective training programe，during which I made many new friends．
 during which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句，是提分的句型．
表示地點(diǎn)，時(shí)間和原因的"介詞+which"分別相當(dāng)于 where，when，why．
I'll never forget the day on which/when I joined the League．
I know a wood in which/where you can find roses．
Is there any reason for which/why you should have a holiday？

2．When staying with my classmates，I tried to communicate with them in English，
When staying 作時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)，因?yàn)閟tay的邏輯主語(yǔ)和主句的主語(yǔ)是一致的，故用現(xiàn)在分詞．
謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)作發(fā)生在分詞所表示的動(dòng)作過(guò)程之中，則用when/while+現(xiàn)在分詞的一般式，分詞的邏輯主語(yǔ)為句中的主語(yǔ)．此種情況可以用in+動(dòng)名詞的一般式代替．
也可以換作when、while引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句，該從句的謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞用進(jìn)行時(shí)態(tài)．如：
Don't be careless when/while having an exam．=Don't be careless in having an exam．=Don't be careless when/while you are having an exam．考試時(shí)不要粗心．

3．Whenever I met with native speakers，I had a strong willing to practise English，but I wasn't brave enough to open my mouth，which worried me for a long time．
Whenever引導(dǎo)時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句，but連接的轉(zhuǎn)折句，which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語(yǔ)從句．
Whenever引導(dǎo)讓步狀語(yǔ)從句，表示"無(wú)論何時(shí)"，相當(dāng)于 at whatever time，no matter when等．如：
Whenever I see him，he's reading．我無(wú)論什么時(shí)候看到他，他都在看書．
Whenever I go to London I try to see Vieky．無(wú)論我什么時(shí)候去倫敦，都設(shè)法去看看維基．
Whenever you come，you are welcome．你什么時(shí)候來(lái)，我們都?xì)g迎．

解答 Dear Thomas，
    I'm so thankful to you for your kindness and help in the oral English training course．My spoken English has greatly improved owing to the effective training programe，during which I made many new friends．（高分句型）（表達(dá)謝意與說(shuō)明收獲）
    I used to be shy and un-talkative．When staying with my classmates，I tried to communicate with them in English，but I often made mistakes．（高分句型） Whenever I met with native speakers，I had a strong willing to practise English，but I wasn't brave enough to open my mouth，which worried me for a long time．（高分句型） Luckily enough，your training course smoothed away all the difficulties．I have benefited from it．
Now，I'm glad to learn you are to organize more training courses，and I hope I can get your advice on how to improve my writing．In short，I'm looking forward to more new things in our future courses．
Yours sincerely，（提出建議或要求）
Li Ming

點(diǎn)評(píng) 完成本文時(shí)要充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運(yùn)用英語(yǔ)知識(shí)，采用不同的表達(dá)方式將各要點(diǎn)完整地表述出來(lái)，注意主次分明，詳略得當(dāng)．語(yǔ)言力求準(zhǔn)確、簡(jiǎn)潔．根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料．同時(shí)應(yīng)選用合適的連接詞或過(guò)渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性．考生必須認(rèn)真查驗(yàn)是否有漏寫情況，有無(wú)拼寫錯(cuò)誤及標(biāo)點(diǎn)誤用等．