Question

假如你叫李明，現(xiàn)在給美國(guó)的姑姑發(fā)一封電子郵件，告訴她近5年來(lái)家鄉(xiāng)發(fā)生的變化。內(nèi)容如下：

1. 建了許多高樓大廈，還建了許多新工廠、學(xué)校、醫(yī)院以及立交橋（overpass），街道加寬（widen）、硬化(harden)，交通十分方便；

2. 街心建了一個(gè)公園，路旁的樹木和鮮花使它顯得更加美麗；

3. 許多家庭有了私家車，人們的生活變得豐富多彩；

4. 現(xiàn)在通過(guò)發(fā)電子郵件能更好地與世界各地的朋友保持聯(lián)系。

注意：詞數(shù)100個(gè)左右。

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Answer 1

Dear aunt,

Our hometown has changed a lot in the past five years. Many tall buildings as well as new factories, school, overpasses and hospitals have been built, which are modern and beautiful. Meanwhile, the streets have been widened and hardened, which makes it very convenient for people to travel.

In the center of the street there is a beautiful park, and the flowers and trees by the roadsides make it more beautiful. Besides, many families have got cars of their own. People’s life here has become rich and colorful. And it is now easier to keep in touch with friends all over the world by e-mail.

Best wishes!

Yours,

Ling Ming

【解析】

試題分析：題目要求給在美國(guó)的姑姑寫一封郵件，告訴她家鄉(xiāng)近五年的變化。寫作要點(diǎn)包括：修建了許多高樓大廈、工廠、學(xué)校等；街心建了公園；許多家庭有了私家車，生活變得豐富；能更好地與世界各地的朋友保持聯(lián)系等四個(gè)方面；詞數(shù)在100詞左右；注意書信的格式；不要出現(xiàn)標(biāo)點(diǎn)和拼寫錯(cuò)誤，盡量保持卷面整潔、字體美觀；注意行文的連貫性。

亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明：范文涵蓋了所給要點(diǎn)，并注意語(yǔ)句的連貫性；范文還使用了定語(yǔ)從句、現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)等語(yǔ)法知識(shí)，具備較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力。

語(yǔ)法方面：現(xiàn)在完成時(shí)Our hometown has changed a lot in the past five years.；定語(yǔ)從句①which are modern and beautiful，②which makes it very convenient for people to travel等，使作文句式多樣，使句子銜接緊湊、自然；

篇章結(jié)構(gòu)方面：范文注意使用meanwhile, and, besides等銜接句子和段落，使表達(dá)變得很有條理；

短語(yǔ)和搭配方面：范文使用了as well as, have got, of their own, keep in touch with, all over the world, makes it convenient for sb to do等，使作文的內(nèi)容得到充實(shí)。

考點(diǎn)：書信類作文