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4．我校校報Superview需要一些介紹中國著名省市的稿件．請根據(jù)以下提示，用英語寫一篇介紹云南省的短文，并投稿．

地名	云南�。�南部美麗的云彩）
位置	最云南的省份
面積	393，000平方公里
民族	擁有25個少數(shù)民族
地理特征	擁有高山，湖泊和熱帶雨林
稀有動物	被譽為"動物王國"，有金絲猴，亞洲象等
植物	"世界花園"，擁有世界上一半的植物物種
自然奇觀	石林、虎跳峽等

要求：1．可適當填加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
2．詞數(shù)100詞左右．
參考詞匯：石林Stone Forest虎跳峽Tiger Leaping Gorge物種species
熱帶雨林rainforest少數(shù)民族ethnic minority．
Located in the most southwest of China，Yunnan province enjoys a popular name，beautiful clouds in the south．Covering an area of 394，000 square kilometers，it's the most diverse region of China with 25 ethnic minorities．（高分句型一）
Yunnan has its unique geographical features，which includes everything from mountains and lakes to rainforests．Because of this special geographical environment，Yunnan is also home to half of the world's plant species and rare animals，such as golden monkeys and Asian elephants and so on．（高分句型二）Therefore，Yunnan is well-known as"world garden"and"kingdom of animals"．As a land of natural beauty and mystery，Yunnan is also well-known for its breath-taking natural wonders，such as Stone Forest，Tiger Leaping Gorge，which attract numerous tourists every year．（高分句型三）
Yunnan is open to the world now．It warmly welcomes all friends to visit it．．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于圖表類作文，根據(jù)提示信息我校校報Superview需要一些介紹中國著名省市的稿件．請根據(jù)以下提示，用英語寫一篇介紹云南省的短文，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：地名，位置，面積，民族，地理特征，稀有動物和自然奇觀，2、圖表是文章的總體框架，要在圖表的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：Located in位于；Because of 由于；Therefore因此；be well-known for 因為…而出名；be open to對…開放；
Covering an area of 394，000 square kilometers，it's the most diverse region of China with 25 ethnic minorities．（高分句型一）
Because of this special geographical environment，Yunnan is also home to half of the world's plant species and rare animals，such as golden monkeys and Asian elephants and so on．（高分句型二）
As a land of natural beauty and mystery，Yunnan is also well-known for its breath-taking natural wonders，such as Stone Forest，Tiger Leaping Gorge，which attract numerous tourists every year．（高分句型三）

解答 Located in the most southwest of China，Yunnan province enjoys a popular name，beautiful clouds in the south．Covering an area of 394，000 square kilometers，it's the most diverse region of China with 25 ethnic minorities．（高分句型一）
      Yunnan has its unique geographical features，which includes everything from mountains and lakes to rainforests．Because of this special geographical environment，Yunnan is also home to half of the world's plant species and rare animals，such as golden monkeys and Asian elephants and so on．（高分句型二）Therefore，Yunnan is well-known as"world garden"and"kingdom of animals"．As a land of natural beauty and mystery，Yunnan is also well-known for its breath-taking natural wonders，such as Stone Forest，Tiger Leaping Gorge，which attract numerous tourists every year．（高分句型三）
      Yunnan is open to the world now．It warmly welcomes all friends to visit it．

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．