Question

【題目】以下是一則關(guān)于中國姑娘蔡語婧在波士頓大學(xué)畢業(yè)演講的報(bào)道，請(qǐng)就此寫一篇150詞左右的英語作文。

Chinese student praised for inspiring US graduation speech

Receiving her Master of Science in Math Finance from Boston University, Cai Yujing, who comes from Nanjing city east China’s Jiangsu Province, spoke about her hometown and family members present at the ceremony, and then shared her 6-year experience studying with students from different cultural backgrounds.

In her 7-minute speech, Cai talked about how she adapted to the diverse community at the Questrom School of Business and established mutual understanding with fellow students.

Overcoming awkwardness, nervousness, and even occasional anger when exchanging ideas with people from different countries, she said she also experienced the joy of sharing, inspiring and embracing each other, adding that such an experience opened her mind to learning about and embracing diversity.

Cai’s speech won a lot of praise online with some saying her address highlighted the positive perspective of Chinese students.

【寫作內(nèi)容】

1. 用約30個(gè)單詞概述上述報(bào)道的主要內(nèi)容；

2. 用約120個(gè)單詞發(fā)表你的觀點(diǎn)，內(nèi)容包括：

（1）簡要分析接納和包容多元化的重要性（至少兩點(diǎn)）；

（2）結(jié)合實(shí)例，談?wù)勗谛颅h(huán)境中如何做到接納和包容。

【寫作要求】

1. 寫作過程中不能直接引用原文語句；

2. 作文中不能出現(xiàn)真實(shí)姓名和學(xué)校名稱；

3. 不必寫標(biāo)題。

【評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)】

內(nèi)容完整，語言規(guī)范，語篇連貫，詞語適當(dāng)。

【參考詞匯】包容accept v. 接納 embrace v.

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Answer 1

【答案】Cai Yujing’s graduation speech has won widespread applause, in which she shared some of her experiences while studying abroad and emphasized the significance of accepting and embracing diversity.(28 words)

Personally, it is of critical importance to accept and embrace diversity. To begin with, undeniably, there exist various cultures, races and lifestyles worldwide. Acceptance of differences can help construct a harmonious atmosphere. Moreover, exposed to a new environment, we should adapt ourselves and fit in. Thus, shared understanding can be achieved and mutual learning can be promoted, which can enhance our personal growth.

Take myself as an example. On the first day of my high school, I felt nervous, surrounded by classmates with different academic and family backgrounds. But once I opened my mind, I overcame uneasiness and nervousness. We participated in class activities and learned from each other. In my mind, embracing diversity means opening a door to a happy life.(154 words)

【解析】本文屬于讀寫任務(wù)寫作，動(dòng)筆前，一定要認(rèn)真閱讀原文，并理解內(nèi)容。認(rèn)真看清題目要求，這篇書面表達(dá)給了一段材料：先要求以約30個(gè)詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容，本文主要講述了一位中國女研究生在畢業(yè)典禮上的精彩演講，她在演講中強(qiáng)調(diào)了接受和接觸多元文化的重要性。概括時(shí)注意要抓住文章的主題。然后再以約120個(gè)詞寫一篇短文，按照要點(diǎn)去表達(dá)，不能有遺漏，要注意題中所給的信息，不可偏題，要達(dá)到寫作目的，切記不要忘記結(jié)合實(shí)例介紹，并要發(fā)表自己的觀點(diǎn)。寫作時(shí)注意準(zhǔn)確運(yùn)用時(shí)態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關(guān)系。盡量使用自己會(huì)的單詞、詞組和句型，同時(shí)也要注意使用一些高級(jí)語法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。注意條理要清晰，邏輯順序和結(jié)構(gòu)要恰當(dāng)，同時(shí)要盡量保持簡潔精干的內(nèi)容，不拖泥帶水。

【亮點(diǎn)說明】本文內(nèi)容齊全，結(jié)構(gòu)嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，層次分明，布局合理，語言精練，同時(shí)運(yùn)用高級(jí)句子、短語和詞匯。第一段總結(jié)全文，使用了一個(gè)定語從句和一個(gè)狀語從句，并使用了短語emphasized the significance和高級(jí)詞匯embracing diversity，內(nèi)容概括全面，準(zhǔn)確表達(dá)了文章的中心思想。第二段首句使用了it作形式主語，不定式為真正主語，personally為評(píng)注性狀語，同時(shí)應(yīng)用了短語of+抽象名詞。To begin with…, Moreover …thus…等過渡詞的使用增強(qiáng)了文章的連貫性。Moreover, exposed to a new environment, we should adapt ourselves and fit in.使用了過去分詞短語作狀語，fit in等短語；Thus, shared understanding can be achieved and mutual learning can be promoted, which can enhance our personal growth.使用了動(dòng)名詞作主語和情態(tài)動(dòng)詞的被動(dòng)語態(tài)以及which引導(dǎo)的非限制定語從句。On the first day of my high school, I felt nervous, surrounded by classmates with different academic and family backgrounds.使用了狀語surrounded by classmates with different academic and family backgrounds，增強(qiáng)了句子的可讀性。