Question

假如你叫李華，今年暑假即將跨入高三的學(xué)習(xí)，壓力很大，想和父母說說心里話，請你用英文在你的博客上用書信形式表達出來。主要內(nèi)容如下：

知心話	感恩	感謝父母的關(guān)心、鼓勵
對父母的期望	1. 多加交流 2. 適時提供幫助
學(xué)習(xí)打算	考生自擬（至少寫兩點）

注意：1. 短文必須包括所有內(nèi)容要點，可適當發(fā)揮。
    2. 詞數(shù)：120左右（開頭與結(jié)尾已給出，不計入詞數(shù)）。

Dear Mom and Dad,

With the Senior Three approaching, I really hope to have a heart-to-heart talk with you!

 

 

 

 

 

Mom and Dad, I am quite confident about my future. Wish you good health and a happy life.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

 

Answer 1

Dear Mom and Dad,
    With the Senior Three approaching, I really hope to have a heart-to-heart talk with you!
    During the years, I always feel grateful for your unselfish care and love. Thanks to your constant encouragement, I have been making remarkable progress in my studies. 
    Since it will be less than one month before the exam, I'm under great pressure now. I would appreciate it if you can have a frequent talk with me and provide me with timely help,which contributes to my staying in a good state.
    I am fully aware of the responsibilities I am shouldering. I have made up my mind to make every effort to study, for I believe hard work is the key to success.Just as the saying goes,"no pains, no gains." Meanwhile, I will spare some time to participate in sports activities, aiming to build up my body and free myself from the heavy work of studies.
    Mom and Dad, I am quite confident about my future. Wish you good health and a happy life.
                                                                                                                  Yours sincerely,
                                                                                                       Li Hua

【解析】

試題分析：本文的屬于提綱類寫作，要求對父母說說心里話，話題切合考生實際，與考生的生活非常貼近，考生有話可說，有很強的可寫性。要點是以提綱的形式給出的，要求考生有較強的整合能力，在寫作時充分利用連接詞，高級句型和詞匯，如果可能在文章結(jié)尾運用諺語，以使文章的層次更高。應(yīng)該用合適的連接詞，可以適當使用高級的句式和高級的詞匯來給文章增色。在例舉學(xué)習(xí)打算的時候可以加入諺語，讓文章更上一層樓。

【亮點說明】范文使用了很多詞組：Thanks to 多虧，making remarkable progress 取得很大的進步，made up my mind to 決定，make every effort to study努力學(xué)習(xí)， the key to…的關(guān)鍵。 還使用了不少精典句式，如： Since it will be less than one month before the exam, I'm under great pressure now. 這句話使用了固定句型，I would appreciate it if you can have a frequent talk with me and provide me with timely help,which contributes to my staying in a good state.這句話使用了it做形式賓語和which引導(dǎo)的定語從句，I am fully aware of the responsibilities I am shouldering.這句話使用了定語從句， Meanwhile, I will spare some time to participate in sports activities, aiming to build up my body and free myself from the heavy work of studies這句話使用了現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語。文章還恰當?shù)厥褂昧怂渍Z：Just as the saying goes,"no pains, no gains."。

考點: 考查提綱類書面表達