Question

Directions: Write an English composition according to the instructions given below in Chinese.
假如你是李明，昨天學校為你們舉辦了十八歲成人儀式。請根據(jù)下列要點給你在
美國的筆友發(fā)一封電子郵件，描述儀式過程并簡述你的感受。
1. 成人宣誓  2. 感謝家長和老師的教育和培養(yǎng)  3. 家長代表講話  4. 表演節(jié)目
注意：1. 郵件必須包括以上要點，可適當發(fā)揮；
2. 詞數(shù)：120以上；
3. 開頭結(jié)尾已為你寫好
4. 生詞：宣誓 make an oath     成人儀式 coming-of –age ceremony
Dear Mike,
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Yours
Li Ming 

Answer 1

Dear Mike,  
I am very glad to receive your e-mail. Now I'd like to tell you something that took place in my school yesterday. In the afternoon we held a growing-up ceremony for our coming 18-year-old birthday.
First we made an oath that we should have a sense of duty for our society as grown-ups from now on. Then we showed our thanks to our parents who had gone through hardships to bring us up and teachers who have been educating us patiently. And one of representatives of the parents who attended the ceremony gave a speech to congratulate us on becoming proud citizens of the republic. Finally, we put on wonderful performances, singing and dancing. We learned a lot from the activity. I decide I will work hard at my lessons to fulfill my dream so that I can be more competent and better shoulder my responsibility for my family as well as my country.
I think it's very important for us. I will remember the day in my life. 
Yours
Li Ming 

試題分析：本文主要提及的是“成人儀式”的話題，這一話題是很多人都很熟悉的。注意寫作要求的要點：1. 成人宣誓  2. 感謝家長和老師的教育和培養(yǎng)  3. 家長代表講話  4. 表演節(jié)目。
寫作時充分發(fā)揮自己的想象力，靈活運用英語知識，采用不同的表達方式將各要點完整地表述出來，注意主次分明，詳略得當。語言力求準確、簡潔。根據(jù)情景的發(fā)展，按順序安排好材料。同時應選用合適的連接詞或過渡詞，使文章具有一定的連貫性�？忌�必須認真查驗是否有漏寫情況，有無拼寫錯誤及標點誤用等
【亮點說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如be glad to，take place，from now on，go through，bring up，give a speech，congratulate sb. on doing sth.，fulfill one’s dream；還運用高級句型that引導的名詞性從句，who引導的定語從句。并注意了句子的銜接如：first，then，finally，and，so that，as well as等等。