Question

18．假定你是李華，你在上周日乘坐一輛公交車，該公交車司機的不文明行為讓乘客很憤怒．于是你向公交車公司寫一封投訴信．要點如下：
1．司機的不文明行為（聊天、緊急剎車、態(tài)度粗魯?shù)龋��?br />2．希望盡快查清此事．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右．2．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
Dear Sir，
I am Li Hua．I am writing to         ．
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本文是一篇提綱作文．根據(jù)所提供的材料信息，向公交車公司寫一封投訴信，投訴該公交車司機的不文明行為．
寫作時人稱以第一人稱和第三為主，時態(tài)以一般現(xiàn)在時和一般過去時為主．
寫作要點：1．司機的不文明行為（聊天、緊急剎車、態(tài)度粗魯?shù)龋��?2．希望盡快查清此事；
重要短語：complain about （抱怨），not only…，but also…（不但…，而且…），keep on doing （一直做某事），advise sb to do sth（建議某人做某事），concentrate on  （集中在…），pay attention to doing （注意某事），bear sth （忍受某事），keep sth in mind（把…記在腦海中），lose one's balance（失去平衡），It's none of your business （不關某人的事），investigate this incident （調查這個事故），take proper measures （采取適當?shù)拇胧�）�?br />【高分句型】
1．Last Sunday，I was taking a bus whose driver not only kept on talking with a man loudly but also drove very fast．
此處是由關系代詞"whose"引導的定語從句，先行詞為"bus"，whose bus=the bus+of which=of which+the bus．
2．Then another passenger couldn't bear it，asking the driver to keep the passengers'safety in mind．
此處是由現(xiàn)在分詞短語作伴隨狀語，主句為"Then another passenger couldn't bear it"，主句的主語"another passenger"與所給動詞"ask"存在邏輯上的主動關系．

解答 Dear Sir，
I am Li Hua．I am writing to complain about one of your bus-drivers'improper and rude behaviors．（開頭---引出話題）
    Last Sunday，I was taking a bus whose driver not only kept on talking with a man loudly but also drove very fast．【高分句型】So some passengers advised him to concentrate on driving，but he didn't pay any attention．What's worse，he drove even faster．Then another passenger couldn't bear it，asking the driver to keep the passengers'safety in mind．【高分句型】But the driver stopped the bus so suddenly that all the passengers nearly lost their balance．However，he didn't apologize but said rudely"It's none of your business．"（司機的不文明行為（聊天、緊急剎車、態(tài)度粗魯?shù)龋��?/p>

點評 提綱作文在寫作時要注意內(nèi)容是否包含了所有要點．寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次，平時需注意積累短語和重要句型．