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5．假設(shè)你是李華，你所在城市的交通擁擠問(wèn)題日趨嚴(yán)重，交通事故時(shí)有發(fā)生，特別是在上下班高峰時(shí)段．請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，用英語(yǔ)給市政府寫(xiě)一封信，反映交通狀況并提出自己的建議．
提示：1．反映交通狀況；
2．提出改善建議；
3．希望和祝福．
注意：1．可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫；
2．詞數(shù)100左右；
3．信的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已經(jīng)為你寫(xiě)好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)．
Dear Sir/Madam，
I'm writing to reflect the traffic situation of our city．
                                                                                        
Yours，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于提綱類(lèi)作文，根據(jù)提示信息假設(shè)你是李華，你所在城市的交通擁擠問(wèn)題日趨嚴(yán)重，交通事故時(shí)有發(fā)生，特別是在上下班高峰時(shí)段．請(qǐng)根據(jù)以下提示，用英語(yǔ)給市政府寫(xiě)一封信，反映交通狀況并提出自己的建議．寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，明確幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)：反映交通狀況；提出改善建議；希望和祝福2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫(xiě)．本文寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：
要點(diǎn)一：眾所周知，我市的交通問(wèn)題正變得越來(lái)越嚴(yán)重，尤其是高峰時(shí)段．
As is known to us，the traffic problem in our city is becoming more and more serious，especially during the rush hours．（as引導(dǎo)非限制性定語(yǔ)從句）
要點(diǎn)二：每天很多車(chē)在路上行駛．
Many cars are running on the roads every day．
要點(diǎn)三：其中的一些車(chē)況不好的車(chē)輛在路上運(yùn)行，司機(jī)很難通過(guò)．
Some of them are in bad condition and it is difficult for the drivers to go across．
要點(diǎn)四：我認(rèn)為到了我們市政府必須采取有效措施來(lái)解決這一問(wèn)題的時(shí)候了．
It's high time that the city government took some effective measures to solve the  problem．
要點(diǎn)五：首先，很多路需要加寬修繕．
Firstly，many roads need to be widened and repaired．
要點(diǎn)六：其次，我們需要修建立交橋（overpass）來(lái)緩解交通堵塞．
Secondly，we need to build overpasses so as to cut down traffic jams．
要點(diǎn)七：需要嚴(yán)格控制私家車(chē)的數(shù)量．
The number of private cars must be strictly controlled．
要點(diǎn)八：只要采取上述措施，我相信交通問(wèn)題會(huì)得到解決，交通事故會(huì)得到控制．
As long as we take the above measures，I'm sure the traffic problem will be  solved and the traffic accidents will be controlled．
要點(diǎn)九：我希望政府會(huì)接受我的建議．
I hope our government will accept my suggestions．
句式升級(jí)一：用what引導(dǎo)主語(yǔ)從句改寫(xiě)要點(diǎn)一
What is known to us is that the traffic problem in our city is becoming more and more serious，especially during the rush hours．
句式升級(jí)二：用"some of which"引導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句連接要點(diǎn)二、三
Many cars are running on the roads every day，some of which are in bad condition and it is difficult for the drivers to go across．
句式升級(jí)三：用do強(qiáng)調(diào)要點(diǎn)九
I do hope our government will accept my suggestions．

解答 Dear Sir/Madam，
       I'm writing to reflect the traffic situation of our city．
       What is known to us is that the traffic problem in our city is becoming more and more serious，especially during the rush hours．（高分句型一）Many cars are running on the roads every day，some of which are in bad condition and it is difficult for the drivers to go across．It's high time that the city government took some effective measures to solve the problem．（高分句型二）Firstly，many roads need to be widened and repaired．Secondly，we need to build overpasses so as to cut down traffic jams．Thirdly，the number of private cars must be strictly controlled．
       As long as we take the above measures，I'm sure the traffic problem will be solved and the traffic accidents will be controlled．（高分句型三）And I do hope our government will accept my suggestions．
                                                                                                                                                                                                     Yours，
                                                                                                                                                                                                    Li Hua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫(xiě)時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫(xiě)作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫(xiě)作方面的基本方法和技巧．