Question

9．假設(shè)你是School Kids Times雜志的編輯，你收到了一封讀者來(lái)信．一位名叫 Julia的讀者在信中向你訴說(shuō)了她的煩惱．內(nèi)容如下：
Dear Editor，
Most of my classmates have mobile phones．They phone each other，surf the Internet and play games．I ask my parents to buy one for me，but they always refuse．I'm so angry that I can't get on well with my parents about the mobile phones．Do you think I'm right？What should I do？
Julia
請(qǐng)你針對(duì)她的問(wèn)題給她寫(xiě)一封80詞左右的回信，談?wù)勀愕目捶�，并給她提幾條建議．信的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已給出，不計(jì)人總詞數(shù)．
Dear Julia，
I'm very happy that I can help you．                     
I hope my suggestions will be helpful to you．
Editor．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內(nèi)容是針對(duì)讀者的來(lái)信給其回信，針對(duì)她和父母因手機(jī)產(chǎn)生的煩惱提出建議，注意郵件的格式．時(shí)態(tài)主要為一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)．人稱(chēng)主要為第二人稱(chēng)及第三人稱(chēng)．
寫(xiě)作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開(kāi)作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個(gè)方面展開(kāi)作文，即本文的寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)：
1看法：認(rèn)為她做的對(duì)嗎？
2建議
常用到的重點(diǎn)短語(yǔ)：
pay attention to 關(guān)注 留意
had better do sth 最好做某事
work hard 努力學(xué)習(xí)
not…any more 不再
talk about sth with sb和某人談?wù)撃呈?br />【高分句型】
1．Now public phones booths can be found everywhere．
情態(tài)動(dòng)詞的被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)---情態(tài)動(dòng)詞+be+過(guò)去分詞，主語(yǔ)是public phones booths是動(dòng)詞find的承受者，故用被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)．為了突出主語(yǔ)．
2．①You'd better②have a talk with your parents and tell them③you don't want one any more．
①had better do sth 最好做某事．
②have a talk with sb 和某人交談．
③作為tell的賓語(yǔ)后跟了賓語(yǔ)從句，引導(dǎo)詞that省略，not…any more 不再．

解答 Dear Julia，
       I'm very happy that I can help you．I don't think you're right．Students should pay attention to their study．Mobile phones are not always necessary．They're not like books and pens．You should understand your parents and do what they ask．（看法）
     Now public phones booths can be found everywhere．【高分句型】If you have to make a phone call，you may use them．You'd better have a talk with your parents and tell them you don't want one any more．【高分句型】Work hard on your lessons and read more interesting books．You may also talk about your problem with your teachers and friends．（建議）
I hope my suggestions will be helpful to you．
Editor．

點(diǎn)評(píng) 此為材料作文，要仔細(xì)審題，抓住重點(diǎn)，將所給信息條理清楚的表達(dá)出來(lái)，可使用一些表示順序的詞，使論述更明確，更有層次感．還要注意多使用一些委婉的提建議的句型，盡量使用不同的句型以避免文章枯燥單調(diào)．要求語(yǔ)句通順，語(yǔ)法，詞匯，時(shí)態(tài)正確，書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范．